shinysylver: (H50 - Steve/danny - foreplay)
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Title: Tear My Heart Open
Author:[livejournal.com profile] shinysylver
Characters/Pairing: Steve/Danny; background Danny/Rachel
Word Count: 921
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: I don't own Hawaii Five-0.
Warning: Rough sex and emotional manipulation.
Summary: Steve wants Danny however he can get him.
Author's Note: [community profile] kink_bingo 2011: Emotion Play. Thanks to [livejournal.com profile] somehowunbroken for the reassurance and a quick beta. The title is from the Papa Roach song Scars.



Steve knew the waiter had been eyeing him all night, flirting with casual touches and light banter, and he’d encouraged it. Steve had returned the attention, letting his fingers linger when the waiter brought him a new beer, but he always kept one eye on Danny. With each touch, Danny’s jaw would tighten and his eyes would flash with anger but he never said anything. He couldn’t with Rachel sitting beside him.

Steve knew exactly what he was doing, but he didn’t care. If Danny wanted to be with Rachel then so be it, but that didn’t mean Steve had to be a monk. So what if Steve didn’t care one bit about the waiter? So what if he was only doing it to get under Danny’s skin? It was exactly what Danny deserved for leaving Steve. Danny had tossed Steve away in favor of Rachel and now he had to live with it. And really it served him right for bringing Rachel out for beers with the team every week. If Danny wanted to be cruel, well, two could play that game.

Eventually, when he knew that Danny had nearly reached his limit, Steve excused himself and made his way to the restroom. He heard Danny get up to follow him and nearly trembled at the thrill coursing through his body, but he resolutely kept his eyes forward, perpetuating the façade that this was all unintentional.

As soon as he entered the bathroom, he paused in front of the sinks, waiting. It didn’t take long for Danny to throw the door open angrily. Steve watched impassively as Danny paced back and forth in front of the door, trying to get himself under control.

“Did you need something?” Steve asked mildly.

“Did I need something?” Danny repeated. He stopped pacing and rushed forward, pressing Steve back against the sinks. “Damn right I need something.” Danny began desperately fumbling with Steve’s belt, his hands clumsy. “I hate you. I hate you so much.”

Steve couldn’t argue with that, he hated himself too, so instead he leaned down and kissed Danny. It was a vicious kiss, full of teeth and hard enough to bruise. Danny gave as good as he got, biting Steve’s lower lip hard enough to draw blood. Steve moaned as the sharp pain went straight to his dick and he thrust his hips up against Danny’s still fumbling hands.

Thankfully, Danny finally managed to undo Steve’s pants and yanked them down exposing Steve’s very hard cock. Danny groaned at the sight and grasped Steve’s dick tightly in his hand, stroking roughly. “That man, that waiter, you did that on purpose, didn’t you?”

It wasn’t really a question because they both already knew the answer, but Steve replied anyway. “Yes,” he panted, thrusting his hips up to meet Danny’s hand. “He’s nothing.”

“Damn right he’s nothing,” Danny growled. He stilled his hand and squeezed Steve’s dick tight enough it hurt, before letting go. “Turn around. Turn around so I can fuck you. That’s what you want, isn’t it?”

“Yes,” Steve groaned. He turned around and leaned over, his elbows resting on the sink.

Steve immediately felt two of Danny’s fingers roughly probing at his hole and he braced himself, biting his lip at the burn. He did his best to relax as Danny quickly added a third finger before pulling out, leaving him feeling empty. Steve heard the rustling of paper as Danny tore open a condom and then, he felt Danny’s cock pressing bluntly at his entrance.

Danny didn’t waste any time, driving forward to bury himself in Steve with one quick thrust. Steve winced at the painful stretching but forced himself to relax as Danny began to thrust. He set a brutal pace, driving into Steve mercilessly.

“You like that?” Danny asked, bitterly. He changed his angle so that his cock grazed against Steve’s prostate with every thrust.

“Yeah,” Steve moaned. He reached down and grabbed his own cock pulling hard in time with Danny’s thrusts. “Harder.”

Danny complied, pounding into Steve so hard that Steve’s head began to knock against the mirror, but he didn’t care, the pain only made it better, more intense. Steve lost himself as his world narrowed down to the vulgar smack of skin on skin. He could feel the pleasure build, pooling in his spine until finally it was too much and he came, his body clenching around Danny’s cock.

Steve slumped forward into the sink and closed his eyes as Danny thrust a few more times before he halted, circled his hips, and came with a moan. Danny collapsed against Steve’s back and for a moment Steve forgot himself, reaching up to cover Danny’s hand with his own. Danny jerked back at the touch, pulling out of Steve, leaving him suddenly cold and empty. He turned to watch as Danny quickly disposed of the condom and began righting his clothes.

“I hope you’re happy,” Danny muttered darkly before turning and leaving the room without a backwards glance.

“Not really.” Steve sighed, pulling up his pants.

Once he was presentable he took a deep breath and made his way out of the restroom to rejoin the group. Danny was probably already making his excuses, trying to leave before Steve got back. He always did. But next week, next week he would bring Rachel just like always and Steve would find somebody different to flirt with. Steve knew it was wrong but he couldn’t stop himself. He needed Danny however he could get him.

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Date: 2011-08-14 07:20 am (UTC)
somehowunbroken: (5-0 Steve/Danny guns drawn)
From: [personal profile] somehowunbroken
♥ Oh boys.

Date: 2011-08-14 07:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
They aren't just broken...they're shattered.

Thanks for the support on this one!

Date: 2011-08-14 07:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bfive0.livejournal.com
I've read more kink bingo fics in this fandom than I did my whole life X_X And this was great!!!!

Date: 2011-08-14 09:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2011-08-14 08:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] antivol.livejournal.com
Oh, that's sad. But very well done (and hot!)!

Date: 2011-08-14 09:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2011-08-14 08:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tibbslover.livejournal.com
OH my this was so sad and hot and angry and hot and heartbreaking and hot.

Just...WOW!!!

Date: 2011-08-14 09:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
I'll take that. *g*

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 08:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bandbfan.livejournal.com
Oh Miss Shiny aren't you just so good!
This was amazing but so sad. Sad that they have gotten to this place, must make life HELL at HQ!
TYVM for writing and sharing.

Date: 2011-08-14 09:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
I'm sure the Five-0 is collapsing under the weight of this. Poor Chin and Kono. :(

Thank you for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 08:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tarnishedangel2.livejournal.com
Hi, Shinysylver

WOW!!! I LOVE this piece!!!

First, it's unusual to see one of the boys in an unrequited situation. It's always the female character that's left pining over the loss of Steve or Danny while the boys go off together. That's even the case in some fics labeled "het". In fact, I almost skipped this one when I read "background Danny/Rachel", but I'm quite fond of your writing; so, I clicked anyway. I'm so GLAD that I did. : )

Second, I LOVE how Danny realizes that Steve is manipulating him. and I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE, the way Danny pushes Steve against the bathroom sinks and forces him to admit flirting with the waiter was "nothing". The way you describe that kiss is off the charts HOT. *fans self*, and the actual sex is all raw and rough just like good slash between these two ought to be...YUMMY sigh!!!

The way you describe Steve's longing at the end is appropriately bittersweet, and the way Steve is already thinking about the next waiter he will flirt with to get Danny's attention illustrates that nicely.

Excellent work!!! : )

Take care!!! : )

Tarnished

Date: 2011-08-15 05:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments! The mean a lot. I'm glad you gave the piece a try and enjoyed it! Thank you for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 08:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] theellibu.livejournal.com
Oh boys. This is hot, angsty and heartbreaking at the same time. My favourite combination ♥

Date: 2011-08-15 05:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's one of my favorite combinations too. :D

Date: 2011-08-14 10:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mystic-jc.livejournal.com
Ooooh gawd, this is sad but wonderfully written! <3

Date: 2011-08-15 05:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!

The story "Tear My Heart Open"

Date: 2011-08-14 12:59 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
When will Steve and Danny get the hint that they should be together? I would love to read more to see if they will get together and be happy together!!!!! This every once in awhile get together to have sex just not cut it!!!
marypierce2000@yahoo.com

Re: The story "Tear My Heart Open"

Date: 2011-08-15 05:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
I don't think there is any happily every after here. :(

Thanks for reading.

Date: 2011-08-14 01:01 pm (UTC)
seleneheart: (five-0)
From: [personal profile] seleneheart
Ouch. But their emotional connection is undeniable, no matter how they might wish differently.

Date: 2011-08-15 04:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
I'm glad that came through, but, you're right, Danny in particular wants the connection gone.

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 01:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lasamy.livejournal.com
Oh boyssssss, so fucked up and hot you two together.
Very well done, dear! *.*

Date: 2011-08-15 04:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2011-08-14 01:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] starbuckssue.livejournal.com
Oh the angst! How long do they really think they can go on like this? It must be pretty obvious that they need each other, everyone must be able to see what they are going through.

Date: 2011-08-15 04:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
If they keep going on like this all that will be left his hate. :(

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 02:40 pm (UTC)
ext_411194: (Grief Steve)
From: [identity profile] jazzybabe56.livejournal.com
my poor poor boys! :(

they love each other so but life won't let them be happy....just the way I like them.......

Date: 2011-08-15 04:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
They are rather full of the angst...

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 03:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] americandirrty.livejournal.com
Wow this is so perfect. I love this story.

Date: 2011-08-15 04:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2011-08-14 03:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kitmerlot1213.livejournal.com
Damn, a passionate yet depressing story--Danny's probably doing his best to make things work with Rachel but he still wants Steve and Steve feels the betrayal but he also still wants Danny.

Beyond painful--great work on this :)

Date: 2011-08-14 09:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you! It hurts but hopefully in a good, dark way. :D

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 04:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] finduilas-clln.livejournal.com
Oh boys. *hugs them* This was heartbreaking and painful but so incredibly well-written. I feel sort silly for always leaving the same kind of comment, but it's always true, your fics are always so wonderful! So I'm always repeating the same thing. *facepalm*

Date: 2011-08-14 09:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Don't feel silly! I love that you take the time to comment and leave me such wonderful feedback.

Thank you for reading!

(no subject)

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Date: 2011-08-14 05:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gottalovev.livejournal.com
damn. that hurts! they are both unhappy and still can't keep apart... oh, boys.

Date: 2011-08-14 09:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
They are both shattered beyond repair. :(

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 07:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] powrhug.livejournal.com
Like how this is slightly dark and a lot angsty rough. Great work.

Date: 2011-08-14 09:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you! It was yet another step outside my comfort zone so I'm glad it seems to work. :D

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-14 08:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shakespherical.livejournal.com
I swear if they leave Danny with Rachel adn she's really pregnant I will just die....poor Steve. Danny is just so fucked up. And you captured taht perfectly.

Hot sex though a still sad ending. Pouts.

:)

Date: 2011-08-14 09:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
They are both absolutely shattered, unfortunately there was no way for a happy ending.

Thanks for reading!
Edited Date: 2011-08-14 09:24 pm (UTC)

Date: 2011-08-14 08:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] donna mezza (from livejournal.com)
Oooooh dark and dirty I love it.

Date: 2011-08-14 09:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2011-08-15 12:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gunslingaaahhh.livejournal.com
ohhhhhhhh myyyyyyyyyy

Date: 2011-08-15 01:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
I hope that's a good, if sad, "oh my."

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-15 01:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] purple-spock.livejournal.com

I like this darker, more bitter side to Steve. And the ending was so heartbreaking, but in such a great way. Well done.

Date: 2011-08-15 01:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!

Date: 2011-08-15 12:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] teddibear.livejournal.com
Oh ow that hurt my heart. Stupid boys. And Stupid Danny for going back to Stupid Rachel. Ow.

The sex was totally hot though. Rough and dirty and man Steve, what a little manipulator you are. Danny deserves it though. Dumb boys. *smacks their heads together*

Date: 2011-08-15 01:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
I'm glad you enjoyed it. Steve is a manipulator, but really I think Danny brings Rachel out for a reason too.

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-15 03:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] forcellari.livejournal.com
Augh! Rip my heart to pieces! :'( God, I love it.

Date: 2011-08-15 04:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
Yay! I'll admit when I was done I was eager to hear your opinion! It seemed like just the angst you would like to devour. ;) Feel free to produce some rainbows any minute now.

I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-08-17 05:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmalee3400.livejournal.com
Aww Steve, you make my heart hurt :(

Date: 2011-08-17 06:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shinysylver.livejournal.com
He's so shattered. :(

Thanks for reading!
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